I woke up with my hands smeared in deep red
blood. It was puzzling. I couldn't fathom how it had got there and I had no
remembrance of my prior actions. I was just groggy, feeling dazed as if I had
been drugged. Dizziness, feebleness and lethargy had gripped me.
I pulled off
my quilt and heaved myself up. The bed groaned underneath and I felt a spasm of
pain around my midriff. I felt as if the air had gone out of my lungs. So, I
inhaled hard willing the cold wind around me to gush into my throat. But I still
couldn't breathe. I coughed to clear the air passage. But no sound emanated
from within. I lifted the jug from the side-table and drank deeply. I could
feel the water streaming down my windpipe, traveling down the ribs and into my
belly...and then my stomach appeared to leak, as water drained out of its walls
and into my bloodied hand.
I felt my stomach with my palm, and felt a
dagger entombed in it. I pulled out the blood-stained dagger and let life drain
out of me completely. My soul had been hanging on there, just holding on to the
long-dead body. But now it was liberated. I had finally solved the puzzle, of
how my hands got smeared with blood. It was my own blood, as you must have
realized by now.
I had committed suicide. I had committed
suicide in my sleep. I, for many months, had been a sleep-walker.
Wow! Such a gripping read and a great plot! Now i am your Fan O' Fan!
ReplyDeletehaha, that is so kind of you....thank you
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Deleteit was a good read but i felt the climax was bit upsetting.. perhaps you should have made it a murder. bcos i wonder will they stab themselves to commit suicide? :o uno, that's really hard to even think of... :(
ReplyDeleteYa actually i wanted to make it different...u know last time i killed a girl who was murdered by her split personality...so i thot of keeping it suicide this time...
DeleteThis has a science fiction feel to it. You should work on it.
ReplyDeleteYa may be...lets see
DeleteRitesh .. the shockers.. so much you love them .. giving right at the end !! Your stories have one thing best .. they thrill!
ReplyDeleteShort Crisp and engrossing story as always !!
hi...thanks..but this story lacked that edge....
DeleteRitesh my friend a shocker and such a well built story! it was quite something... see here I am on your blog and now I will wade out the stories of past from here and read more :)
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Please, feel free....feel at home...my blog is all yours..... :))
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