Tuesday, May 7, 2013

An unusual night





I felt a whiff of breath on my neck. There were goose bumps. They had erupted over my neck as blisters would sprout after contact with a hot iron bar. The only difference being that the breath which made contact with my skin was cold....as cold as cold could be....it was frozen air, frightful, as if someone just dipped my bare skin into a smoky lake on a frosty winter night.

As her breath caressed my nape, i felt aroused. I hadn't experienced anything like it before. My heart seemed to have found its own pace and my mind had transitorily dumped my body. I let her kiss me. She pressed her lips deep into my ears and explored my mouth. I wanted it to go on and on. But i knew i had to do something to make this stop. This was against the law of the nature. A ghost and a human aren't supposed to get physical. Yet, oblivious to this seemingly frivolous law, we clung on to each other, our body wrapped onto each other, we sucked pleasure as life embraced death, the living embraced the dead.

The night witnessed our foreplay and the cloud covered the moon's eye. After an eternity, we let go. Exhausted, we just lay over the tomb living the bygone hours again and again and savouring the moments.
It was through a chance encounter that i met her. I am conscious of the fact that I am unlikely to meet her again. She belongs to a world entirely different from mine, and no matter how much it pains me, i will have to let her go.

As she robed herself and looked set to go, i planted a goodbye peck on her forehead.
Early morning rays had begun to stream in. The moment of painful parting was upon us. I couldn't stifle a tear, but she was an embodiment of stoicism, completely impassive and restrained.
She walked over the threshold of my home and disappeared. I looked back fondly and trudged over to my coffin. This was the first time I had made love to a human.




Update: This story has been featured in the July, 2013 edition of e-magazine ‘Storizen’.
My story- http://issuu.com/storizen/docs/july2013/64



35 comments:

  1. Ha ha ha ha! I have never read anything soooo strange!!! Really Ritesh this is crazy!Ha ha!

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    1. I dnt know why you are luaghing :/

      Did you find this story funny? :O

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    2. It was so DIFFERENT that i ended up laughing! Seriously there is NO need to feel sorry abt anything coz..when i smile or laugh, it's Always Positive!!!! :D Awesome gripping, read :)

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    3. Na, i know dear that u didnt mock at it....i was just surprised ^_^

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    4. :) The author of this article is quite understanding ;) :)

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    5. And the reader of this article is so generous and sweet with her comments :P

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    6. Ha ha :)
      ................talking about the author, i would love to write something for ur blog! :) Reading your comment, i was all excited!.......just tell me what genre, and i'll try my best :)

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    7. Ummm.....any genre...it's up to you....u decide and tell me

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  2. a ghastly ghostly story.mind blowing and nerve wrecking,a strange fiction story.
    Nice style.

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  3. ahhh.. weird but very good narration. you have special thing for this horror, Rats.. :D

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    1. I love to read/watch horror....so i love to write abt it as well ^_^

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  4. one eery bed time story Ritesh :P

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  5. It's a tad bizarre i reckon....not quite spooky or scary.....but if u can get some goosebumps, then i wil sleep a satisfied man ^_^

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  6. I meant "strange n unusual" :D
    it was way too romantic to be scary :P

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  7. this was, i personally feel, not a top-class literary piece....i hope u liked it though

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  8. love needs no mass .. does it ? I loved every bit of the story ! Pain is to depart .. real pain when you know there may not be any other day similar to the spent

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    1. yes, to depart is to leave behind a trail of pain

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  9. That was very unique! And the narration is just awesome and racy..
    quite adventourous though!

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  10. I liked the narration... very well done. The twist the last two lines give the story is the hero here.
    It was twilight-ish.
    However, I feel, it should be a vampire and not a ghost.. as ghosts aren't known to sleep in coffins... but the bloodsucker undeads are. What say?

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    1. Hehe, i am not much familiar with the technical differences between a vampire and ghost :P

      I have also written short stories about vampires...you may check them out some day :)

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  11. I really liked it, specially the end. The last two lines did the trick for the story!

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  12. hello isha....thanks for reading and appreciating ^_^

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  13. Got here through IndiBlogger...

    I liked this short fiction for its first two or three paragraphs. But it would have a greater impact if you followed up the erotica passages with a final line that revealed she is a ghost, instead of stating it way ahead in the narration...

    Hope to read more of your work...

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  14. Thanks....would try to get better ....keep reading

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  15. Wow... its was really an awesome read..!!
    Different and passionate story... tricky end.. I must u r really gud at "twist at the end"...!! Well done

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  16. Super read!! Creepy and scary.. loved the climax!!:-)

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