Tuesday, May 21, 2013

55 word story: He took my breath away






There was pin drop silence in the theatre. A bed scene was on.

Ratul made the first move. His hand slid over my arms and he directed his face towards mine. Our lips came closer. I exhaled in anticipation.....

“Bad breath,” He grimaced, backing off.

Embarrassed, I wished I had opted for a good mouthwash. 





Moral of the Story- Not paying heed to your oral hygiene can cost you your first kiss.Why not run through Colgate's tips & tricks for prevention and cure of Halitosis (bad breath)? You can read them all here and finally fortify your chances of getting that perfect kiss.  

[This post is a part of IndiBlogger's Contest in association with Colgate.]





24 comments:

  1. unique piece of writing summarized in 55 kool :)
    good luck

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  2. WOW! I did expect something cool from you for this contest, but this cool-wow! Too good!

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  3. hehe, this story was 'okay' type....not that much 'cool' or 'wow' kind. But thanks ^_^

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  4. seriously a smart take on the contest :) And why does your bio say "currently unmarried" is tried tested shaadi.com not working :D :D

    Richa

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    1. Hello Richa. I see that this is your visit at my blog. Pretty soon you would know why no girl would have me :P

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  5. i felt horrible reading this .. so take this is as a compliment yet again.. 55 words and I was still engrossed !!
    Best of Luck for the Contest !

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    1. Ummm thanks....why exactly did u feel like that :/

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  6. Oh that was somehow funny to me, good take on this, atb for contest :)

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    1. ya sort of funny it was....thanks kislaya ^_^

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  7. lol. certainly a good take on the prompt. all the best rats :)

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    1. hello rat....thanks for nibbling in dear

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  8. It's quite different - a blend of the contest and the 55 word story! All the best for the contest! :)

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  9. Ha ha...good one...even at such intimate situation you chose to be different...!!!

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  10. Wonderful! You are really good at 55. All the very best Ritesh :)

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  11. see see how much I like ur 55ers you got an award from me!! Congratulations you won a leibster award :)

    You can pick it up here:
    http://subzeroricha.blogspot.in/2013/05/my-first-leibster-award-d-d.html

    Happy blogging :)
    Richa

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  12. Ritesh - You are too good at writing stories with limited words. Too good bro

    TSw

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