Wednesday, March 21, 2012

55 Word Story: The rheumatism



Despite her rheumatism, she braved the spiralling staircase to take the dinner tray to his room. Vicky had shut himself in his room since evening’s heated argument over Sneha. She landed outside his closed door.....paused....then pushed it open.....A spasm of pain pierced her chest as those ageing eyes saw her son’s lifeless body hanging limply.....


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  1. Wow !! This is brilliant .. short and crisp !!

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    1. Thanx Sangy. I hope your son's police-calling activities have come to an end... :D

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  2. I agree. Short, crisp and yet so full of horror..makes you wonder what the argument was all about..hmmm.

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    1. Hi Crystal. Haha....Even I was wondering the same :)

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  3. That was good, and strong.
    I actually saw the picture after I read the 55, don't know how I missed it. Very relevant picture!

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    1. Yes Harish. Thanks a lot. Welcome to my garibkhaana...keep visiting :)

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  4. Beautifully described, yet crisp! :)

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    1. Thanks. Yes, being a 55-word story, it's gotta be crisp na

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