Tuesday, June 11, 2013

55 word story: The birthday gift





I lie trapped within a body which neither lets me die nor live.

Bedridden and immobile, I beseech my children to poison me.

“Let death be the perfect gift for my 70th birthday.”

My grandson trots over, climbs the bed and plants a kiss on my wilted cheek.


He gives me love. A better gift.






[This post has been selected by my team Coup d'East (Team East of 'Indian Bloggers League') as the official entry for the IBL 2013 in the category of "55 word fiction". Hope it wins] 


Topic for the contest was: Write a 55 fiction about the most priceless gift you have received from your loved one.



24 comments:

  1. Love is always better. Isn't it ?
    loved the way story took a U turn in the last statement :)

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    1. Hmmm....love is truly an irreplaceable gift... :)

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  2. lovely !!
    All the best for contest :)

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  3. Love is what make us live...
    Nice Lines

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  4. loved the story, the emotions clearly came out inspite of the word restrictions. All the best Ritesh :)

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  5. Hi Ritesh !!

    The very nature of 55 word fiction taking an abrupt yet pleasant turn in the end makes writing it a joy. I liked your piece and wish you all the best for the contest.

    Cheers !!
    Vivek
    http://viveksheel-blog.blogspot.in/

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  6. How touching!
    I dread old age.

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  7. haha....may you always stay young ;)

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  8. You Indeed are the king of 55-Fiction. I never tried one .. every.

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  9. haha...thanks...u should give a try....i know u will pull it off better than anybody

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  10. I wonder how do you do this. I second ankita and yes the post is the same-surprisingly good :)

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  11. fabulous !! just fabulous !! Ritesh you are best with this , as say , always !! loved it !

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