Saturday, November 10, 2012

55 word story: Mom, I’ll miss you



I lay on the shriveled bed in imbecile placidity.  My 35-year son stood before me perhaps musing over the money required for my kidney transplant. With ageing eyes, I vaguely felt tears in his eyes as he whispered, ‘Mom, I’ll miss you.’ But then darkness descended as a pillow was pressed tight against my face....




5 comments:

  1. Buddy.. too gud.. but u made me sad :(

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  2. Contemporary tragic relationship status weaven so well !!

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  3. Hi Surbhi...now this is a 55 fiction...u can see, here i hav tried to sketch two characters and told their story while working within the limitation of 55 words.

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