Monday, December 24, 2012

55 word story: I closed my eyes





I closed my eyes. Memories of that barbaric day flashed through the darkness like the reel of a film. A tear tried to find a way out. I breathed a silent prayer in my numbness. Then there was a jerk, a pain as the floor below moved and I, Ajmal Kasaab, was hanged till death.....



12 comments:

  1. Absolutely brilliant!! No words to describe it. Easily ur best 55 fiction. Way to go man.

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    1. Hehe.....you exaggerate but loving your comment any way...it gives assurance within :)

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  2. Brilliant one, and a different take indeed.

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  3. You have a great way with portraying the inner emotions of people.Smooth and nearly perfect :)

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  4. Rats, you have such an amazzzing talent in expressing the deepest emotions in just few words.

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    1. @Rat, you know how to flatter dear *gives you a tight ratty hug*

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  5. Hello domestic goddess nextdoor. Your comment gives me joy. thanks so much...do visit again.

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